Vesta (biggelois) wrote in punctuators,
Vesta
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When writing 2nd person POV, should you use present progressive and the -ingform trough out or can you use present simple as well?

"I can hear you think, that can't be good." Sam's voice in your ear makes you jump.
"For fuck's sake!"
Sam chuckles and buries his face against your neck again. "Good morning to you too," he says and licks your ear.

Or:

"I can hear you think, that can't be good." Sam's voice in your ear is making you jump.
"For fuck's sake!"
Sam is chuckling and buring his face against your neck again. "Good morning to you too," he is saying and licking your ear.

I prefer the top one, but which is correct?

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